Thursday, 19 June 2014

Hot sunny day

Today we were learning how to write better sentences.So I wrote this paragraph about me in at the beach.So have a look and I hope you enjoy.

“OUCH , OUCH” I screamed out loud. It was a very hot day and we were at the beach. As I was walking on the sand it felt like my feet were going to burn. I quickly ran to the water, “ahhhhh” it was much better.  Knew I should have brang my jandals.

1 comment:

  1. Awesome work Taunese. I especially like how you used speech marks in your paragraph to show how the character was feeling.